Saturday, January 31, 2009

Essay 2 Final Draft

"From Darkness to Light, A Story of Heroism"

There he stood. Sweat dripping down his forehead as his eyes aimed through the sights of his rifle, squinting to enable him to see through the blaring desert sun. The enemy came within range, and the hero did what he had to: He put a bullet right in the chest of that twelve year old boy.

At first glance, that story might seem repulsive and to entitle that man as a ‘hero’ would sound far from right. Mikah King is both a hero and great friend of mine, and that is one of the many stories he has shared with me. The word ‘hero’ to me defines someone who puts others above themselves, and can react quickly, making a smart decision when thrown into tough situations. In light of this, the people who first come to mind when I think of heroes are the men and women of the United States armed services. Mikah has been in the navy for over two and a half years now, and has displayed brilliant acts of courage and strength. He always puts his comrades above himself, and is quick and bright enough to survive in the modern warfare of our age. For these reasons I am proud to call Mikah my friend, and hero.

To fully appreciate Mikah’s heroism, I believe it’s necessary to first learn about his past. Before he first left for boot camp a couple years ago, Mikah was a completely different person than he is now. He was into some unhealthy habits related to drug use and not enrolled in school of any sort. I won’t be any more specific about the drug abuse out of respect for my friend, but basically he was setting himself up to fail and did not seem to either realize, or care. Then, quite out of the blue really, I come to find out that Mikah had joined the Navy, and already had a date for departure to San Diego, California where he would begin training. Talk about taking a huge step in the right direction. He had chosen to get off the path of darkness which led to certain failure. Gun-shots, grenades, explosions, and all those other wonderful perkswez that come with the military life wouldn’t exactly be a walk in the park, but Mikah knew that when he signed up. He is a tough guy, and finding out what he would be doing with his life made me proud to be his friend. This was when Mikah first started to form into the mold of a ‘hero’ in my eyes.

As a member of the US Navy, Mikah is a soldier who would do anything for his fellow man. He recently came back for a 10 day break and had countless stories to tell of intense combat situations where many lives were at stake. He told me of a time where him and his team were stationed in Fallujah, Iraq, where one must always be alert and ready for action. He was wearing his bullet-proof flak jacket when suddenly a gun shot rang out and whizzed right past one of his fellow soldiers. Putting his friend’s life above his own, Mikah grabbed him by the collar of his jacket and desperately yanked him downward, throwing him to the ground just in time to save him from the next bullet. However, in return Mikah took that bullet himself, directly to the right side of the chest. The blow, which he described felt like unsuspectingly taking a full force knockout punch from Mike Tyson, instantly knocked the wind out of Mikah and put him on his ass for a few seconds. Lucky for Mikah he was wearing that flak jacket, for its without a doubt a better alternative to be winded for a few seconds, than dead forever. This brave act to me makes my classification of Mikah as a hero irrefutable. If saving a fellow comrade from certain death by bullet and absorbing the blow yourself does not make someone a hero, then I don’t know what does.

A hero must also be able to make quick and smart decisions when they are thrown into extraordinary situations. The story in the beginning of this essay greatly exemplifies Mikah’s ability to do this. Although one’s initial thoughts after hearing he shot and killed a boy who was merely twelve years old might be somewhere along the lines of, ‘wow, this guy is a sick bastard’, I assure you, he is not. Out in the desert things are different. Bombs explode and shots ring out from weapons of all sorts on a daily basis. The war concept of kill or be killed doesn’t discriminate against age, and when a little boy who isn’t even old enough to be in high school but can shoot an AK-47 is coming at you, it is sad what has to be done. However it takes a true hero to be able to make the right choice, which in this case was to shoot down the Iraqi insurgent despite his age. What could have happened had Mikah hesitated? He or his fellow comrade’s could have been injured, or even killed. For crucial circumstances bring with them crucial consequences, therefore a hero must be able to react quickly and with sound judgment in these situations and make a choice that will result in the most optimum outcome. That person is Mikah.

Before leaving for the Navy, Mikah was a good friend of mine, but far from a hero. Now that he has those experiences and all that he went though, and has shared with me those stories of courage and sacrifice; I now view him with new eyes; He is a changed man. And in no way was any of the change negative. He has gone from essentially a nobody with no potential, to a soldier; From someone looked down upon by most to a man who now has the respect of nearly everyone in this country; From my good friend Mikah, to my great friend, as well as hero, Mikah King: proud member of the US Navy.

Monday, January 26, 2009

essay two rough draft

A hero is someone who overcomes adversity, puts others above themselves, and when thrown into a tough situation can react and make smart decisions quickly. Thinking about this definition, one group of people instantly comes to mind: United Staten soldiers. When the word hero is mentioned, I instantly think of our country’s armed services, whether it be the Navy, Marines, Army, or Air Force. Every man and woman in these branches are heroes in my opinion, for they would all lay down their lives for their fellow comrades and are trained on a daily basis to be quick and decisive when the time of duty calls. Many have also come from pasts where they did not have much going for them. One man in particular who portrays these qualities is both a hero, and great friend of mine. His name is Mikah King and he serves as a DEO in the US Navy.

Mikah has been a friend of mine for a few years, however, I have not been able to spend a lot of time with him recently due to his constant training and being gone overseas in service. Before he first left for boot camp about 2 and a half years ago, Mikah was a completely different person than he is now. He was into some unhealthy habits related to drug use and not enrolled in school. Basically, I couldn’t tell where he was going with his life. Then I found out he was joining the navy and was already scheduled to leave for California to start training. Although I was sad to hear my friend would be leaving, I couldn’t help but be proud and think that choosing this path was going to overall be a good choice for Mikah. And boy was it the right choice, for Mikah has excelled in the navy and soared beyond his past addictions and bad habits, setting himself apart as a hero in my eyes.

Mikah is a soldier who would do anything for his fellow man. He recently came back for a 10 day break and had countless stories to tell of intense combat situations where many lives were at stake. Hearing these come from my good friend who used to be such a different person made me view him with new eyes; he was a changed man, and in no way was the change I saw bad, for he had went from essentially a nobody, to a valiant soldier. He told me of a time where him and his team were stationed in Fallujah, where one must always be alert and ready for action, and he was wearing his bullet-proof flak jacket when suddenly a gun shot rang out and whizzed right past one of his fellow soldiers. Putting his friends life above his own, Mikah grabbed him by the collar of his jacket and threw him down to the ground, just in time to save him from the next bullet. However, in return Mikah took that bullet to his own bottom right kidney-area. Luckily for Mikah he was wearing that flak jacket. This brave act makes my classification of Mikah as a hero irrefutable. If saving a fellow comrade from certain death by bullet and absorbing the blow yourself does not make someone a hero, then I don’t know what does.

---not quite completed, more body paragraphs and conclusion to come---

Sunday, January 25, 2009

Essay 2 rough draft start

A hero is someone who puts others above themselves, and when thrown into a tough circumstance can react and make good decisions quickly. Thinking about this definition, one group of people instantly comes to mind: United Staten soldiers. When the word hero is mentioned, I instantly think of our country’s armed services, whether it be the Navy, Marines, Army, or Air Force. Every man and woman in these branches are heroes in my opinion, for they would all lay down their lives for their fellow comrades and are trained on a daily basis to be quick and decisive when the time of duty calls. One man in particular who portrays these qualities and is both a hero, and great friend of mine. His name is Mikah King and he serves as a DEO in the US Navy.

Mikah has been a friend of mine for a few years, however, I have spent a fairly limited amount of time with him due to him being gone for over 2 years in service. Before he first left for boot camp about 2 and a half years ago, Mikah was a completely different person than he is now. He was into some unhealthy habits related to drug use and not enrolled in school. Basically, I couldn’t tell where he was going with his life, but then I found out he was joining the navy and already had a date scheduled to leave. Although I was sad to hear my friend would be leaving, I couldn’t help but be proud and think that choosing this path was going to overall be a good choice for Mikah. And boy was it the right choice, for Mikah has excelled in the navy and set himself apart as a hero in my eyes

essay 2 prewrite #2

I have decided to change my hero for essay #2.
although my dad is a definite hero in my life, the first thing that comes to mind when i think of the topic of heroes, members of the US armed services first comes to mind.
To me, they are the true definition of a hero. They put their lives on the line in order to protect the rights of everyone who lives in our great country.
In my essay, I will define what qualities are I believe are heroic, and then write about why people in the army are heroes. The main focus will be on my good friend who I really look up to. His name is Mikah King and he is a DEO in the US navy

Wednesday, January 21, 2009

Essay 1 revision---vonnegut "guts to cut"

Over the years many beliefs and ideas have influenced the way I act and/or think throughout my day to day. These beliefs may be based upon religion, beliefs relating to my own personal morals and values, or simply based on how I perceive the events happening around me. A belief that I have found myself becoming more fond of and finding more relevant in my life is the idea of karma. The principal of this belief is basically that you will get what’s coming to you, good or bad, based on your actions and how you treat others. I have been aware of this concept for quite some time, but only recently has it become undeniably true to me.

There are a number of instances I could give which perfectly demonstrate karma in my life. For example, just a few weeks ago I was sitting at home feeling quite unproductive. I decided to go out on a jog so I could feel better about moping around doing nothing all day. So I changed into some workout gear, laced up my shoes and was off. About half-way through my run I found myself jogging by a small station wagon, and sitting there leaning up against the car was a clean, new-looking Ride snowboard with bindings. I noticed that as far as I could see in any direction, there was no one to be seen. Now I must admit that at this point I was a little tempted to snatch myself a little early Christmas present, however, my guilty conscience getting the best of me, I just kept on running thinking how upset I would be if my snowboard were to magically disappear. As I approached that station wagon on my way back home I saw a young guy struggling to fit the board in his trunk. As I was passing by he stopped me, looking slightly frustrated but mostly unconcerned and said, “hey man, want a free snowboard?” Of course I gladly accepted, took my free snowboard and bindings and went on my merry way.

To me this is a perfect example of karma. The thought of committing a bad deed; stealing a random, unsuspecting person’s snowboard had crossed my mind, but I made the right choice and look what happened in return; I ended up with the snowboard anyways. Now many people would just say something like ‘oh that’s just a weird coincidence’, but that is just one of many stories I could share where a similar event took place. That story is irrefutable evidence that karma is active in my life.

In some sense, karma allows someone to have control over what happens in their life. If someone were to go around stealing out of people’s purses and being a jerk all day for example, then according to my belief in karma that person would get what’s coming to them and perhaps get stolen from themselves. Likewise, a person who is dedicated to being friendly and helpful to others will in return be treated similarly due to good karma. Therefore, the choices I make one day I believe to directly relate to the nature of the events that will happen to me in days to come.Of my many beliefs, karma is one of the most significant that I see in my day to day. Constantly I notice people getting what they deserve based upon their actions, whether good or bad. For that reason, I strive to treat others how I would like to be treated myself. Therefore, I can conclude that my belief in karma helps me to be a nicer, friendlier person than I might be otherwise.

Thursday, January 15, 2009

Essay 1 reflection

For essay number one, there were things I did good, and things that were probably not so good. One thing I tried to keep in mind as I was writing was to vary my sentence structure so that every sentence didnt sound the same. I think I did that well. Also, I think I told the story that was within my essay in very clear and easy to follow manner for the reader. I would also say my overall grammar, vocabulary and spelling were a strong point in my paper.

One thing I could have done better was to perhaps be more specific. This is the advice Craig gave me and I tried to narrow it down but im not sure if i got it. Also, a couple things I said started to sound repetetive to me... maybe it was necessary or maybe it was just plain redundant.

I appreciated the peer editing and some of the comments left helped me in editing my paper. Overall, I thinkn i did fairly well on essay 1 but I know there is plenty of room for improvment.

Essay 1 reflection

essay 2 pre write

My Hero: my father

Physically, he looks strong, and younger than you would expect from his age.

He has offered me advice on countless occassions throughout my life and i definaetly would have made some wrong choices and gotten into more trouble if it had not been for him.

He lives a happy and successful life, and that I admire

my relationsihp with him is obviously a personal one....he is my dad.

Others view this person as a very charismatic and helpful person. I would also say acts younger than his age... in a good way.

Tuesday, January 13, 2009

essay #1 final draft

"Karma, my personal (not religious) belief"

Over the years many beliefs and ideas have influenced the way I act and/or think throughout my day to day. These beliefs may be based upon religion, beliefs relating to my own personal morals and values, or simply based on how I perceive the events happening around me. A belief that I have found myself becoming more fond of and finding more relevant in my life throughout my most recent years is the idea of karma. The main principal of this belief is basically that you will get what’s coming to you, good or bad, based on your actions and how you treat others. I have been aware of this concept for quite some time, but only recently has it become more relevant and undeniably true to me.

There are a number of instances I could give which perfectly demonstrate karma in my life. For example, just a few weeks ago I was sitting at home feeling quite unproductive. I decided to go out on a jog so I could feel better about moping around doing nothing all day. So I changed into some workout gear, laced up my shoes and was off. About half-way through my run I found myself jogging by a small station wagon, and sitting there leaning up against the car was a clean, new-looking Ride snowboard with bindings. I noticed that as far as I could see in any direction, there was no one to be seen. Now I must admit that at this point I was a little tempted to snatch myself a little early Christmas present, however, my guilty conscience getting the best of me, I just kept on running thinking how upset I would be if my snowboard were to magically disappear. As I approached that station wagon on my way back home I saw a young guy struggling to fit the board in his trunk. As I was passing by he stopped me, looking slightly frustrated but mostly unconcerned and said, “hey man, want a free snowboard?” Of course I gladly accepted, took my free snowboard and bindings and went on my merry way.

To me this is a perfect example of karma. The thought of committing a bad deed and stealing a random, unsuspecting person’s snowboard had crossed my mind, but I made the right choice and look what happened in return; I ended up with the snowboard anyways. Now many people would just say something like ‘oh that’s just a weird coincidence’, but that is just one of many stories I could share where a similar event took place. To me, that story is irrefutable evidence that karma is active in my life.

In some sense, karma allows someone to have a little control over what happens in their life. If someone were to go around stealing out of people’s purses and being a jerk all day for example, then according to my belief in karma that person would get what’s coming to them and perhaps get stolen from themselves. Likewise, a person who is dedicated to being friendly and helpful to others will in return be treated similarly due to good karma. Therefore, the choices I make one day I believe to directly relate to the nature of the events that will happen to me in days to come.

Of my many beliefs, karma is one of the most significant that I see in my day to day. Constantly I notice people getting what they deserve based upon their actions, whether good or bad. For that reason, I strive to treat others how I would like to be treated myself. Therefore, I can conclude that my belief in karma helps me to be a nicer, friendlier person than I might be otherwise.

Sunday, January 11, 2009

essay 1 rough draft

Over the years many beliefs and ideas have influenced the way I act and/or think throughout my day to day. These beliefs may be based upon religion, beliefs relating to my own personal morals and values, or simply based on how I perceive the events happening around me. A belief that I have found myself becoming more fond of and finding more relevant in my life throughout my most recent years is the idea of karma. The main principal of this belief is basically that you will get what’s coming to you, good or bad, based on your actions and how you treat others. I have been aware of this concept for quite some time, but only recently has it become more relevant and undeniably true to me. And I am aware that the idea of karma originated as a doctrine of the Hindu religion, I want to be clear that my confidence in this theory carries no religious ties to Hinduism whatsoever.

I suppose for starts I should lay out a few of the countless instances I could give which perfectly demonstrate relevance of karma in my life. For example, just a few weeks ago I was sitting at home feeling quite unproductive so I decided to go out on a jog so I could feel better about moping around doing nothing all day. So I changed into some workout gear, laced up my shoes and was off. About half-way through my run I found myself jogging by a small station wagon, and sitting there leaning up against the car was a clean, new-looking Ride snowboard with bindings. I noticed that as far as I could see in any direction, there was no one to be seen. Now I must admit that at this point I was extremely tempted to snatch myself a little early Christmas present; a new snowboard was one of the things I was really after this year because my current one was a little small for me, not to mention it wasn’t near as nice as the one glowing before me. However, my guilty conscience getting the best of me, I just kept on running thinking how upset I would be if my snowboard were to magically disappear. After another 5 minutes or so of running I decided I had gone far enough and turned around to head home. As I approached that station wagon I saw a young guy struggling to fit the board in his trunk. As I was passing by he stopped me, looking slightly frustrated but mostly unconcerned and said, “hey man, want a free snowboard?” Of course I gladly accepted, took my free snowboard and bindings and went on my merry way. To me this is a perfect example of karma. The thought of committing a bad deed and stealing a random, unsuspecting persons snowboard had crossed my mind, but I made the right choice and look what happened in return; I ended up with the snowboard anyways. Now many people would just say something like ‘oh that’s just a weird coincidence’, but that is just one of many stories I could share where a similar event took place. To me, that story is irrefutable evidence that karma is active in our lives.

---note--- not quite finished...more closure to come.

Wednesday, January 7, 2009

Essay 1 Prewrite

The topic I have chosen to write about falls under the "I believe" category. I am going to write in a belief of mine which has only over the past year become extremely relevant and seemingly more and more true. That belief is in the idea of karma.